To: Brad Blackstone
From: Koo Jia Wei
Date: 16 September 2016
Subject: Self introduction
Dear Brad,
Allow me to introduce myself, I am Koo Jia Wei from Telematics at Singapore Institute of Technology. Prior to studying at Singapore Institute of Technology, I was pursuing a diploma in Electrical and Electronic Engineering at Singapore Polytechnic(SP).
My life in SP was considered smooth sailing until the very end when I had my final year project. The prototype that my team and I created became our sponsoring company's property. We were asked to surrender the prototype which my team and I worked relatively hard on, including all the instruction manual and coding. In the end we were given 2 choices, the 1st choice is to let them take over whatever that we are working on, while the 2nd choice is for us to leave school and join them as their employee. As much as I wanted to carry on working on the prototype, I think obtaining my diploma would be a more practical choice to take. Therefore the decision to surrender the prototype was made.
I have always been interested in engineering since young and I will dismantle the faulty electrical appliances and look at parts that power it. Which leads me to pursing a Telematics degree which consist of engineering and IT.
As I have always been weak in my engineering math, my goal would be to attain at least a B for my engineering math and to graduate with a decent GPA.
I believe that life is precious hence my aim for the future as a Telematics engineer is to try my best to cut down the road accident rate and create a safer road environment in Singapore.
Yours sincerely,
Jia Wei
Commented on: Li Fang, Syafiq and Hui Yee's Blog
Edited on 30092016
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ReplyDeleteDear jia wei,
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your introduction, I have further understood more about you. I admire your interest in engineering as not many people would dismantle a faulty electrical appliances and look at what makes it work. Also I do wish you all the best in cutting down road accident rate in making a safer road environment in Singapore.
Best regards,
Boris Khoo
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DeleteDear jiawei,
ReplyDeleteI enjoy reading your blog post, as it allows me to know you better. I believe that with your interest and effort, you will be able to make a safer road environment in Singapore.
Regards,
Lifang
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ReplyDeleteThis is an informative letter, Jia Wei. It gives a clear view of your interest in engineering. The anecdote about your project is especially revealing about the world of work. I think you've made the right choice. :)
ReplyDeleteThere are a few language issues to take note of:
1) comma splice/ run on sentence
--- Allow me to introduce myself, I am Koo Jia Wei, 22, from Telematics at Singapore Institute of Technology.
--- In the end we were given 2 choices, 1st choice is to let them take over whatever that we are working on, 2nd choice is for us to leave school and join them as their employee.
--- I have always been interested in engineering since young, whenever i get a chance i will dismantle the faulty electrical appliances and take a look at what is actually making it work. (This one has a verb tense problem as well.)
--- I strongly believe that life is precious, hence my aim for the future as a Telematics engineer is to try my best to cut down the road accident rate and create a safer road environment in Singapore.
Please see https://owl.english.purdue.edu/engagement/2/1/34/
2) verb tense error
--- ...that my team and I create....
--- ...which my team and i work relatively hard on....
3) our sponsoring company property >>> (possessive) our sponsoring company's property
4) capitalization: various cases of "i" mot capitalized
Let's work on these!
I look forward to learning more about you this term.